“Speed on to Heaven,” she heard him say, and she closed her eyes in bliss.
That was lovely. I just read this and the original together, and I really enjoyed the way you were true to the tone of the original, and the way you chose words that feel authentic to the story. It's hard to rewrite a story with the same events (minus the Spike), style and tone of the original, but you've done a great job! Spike was a fantastic addition to the tale. =)
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Date: 2006-12-06 01:34 pm (UTC)That was lovely. I just read this and the original together, and I really enjoyed the way you were true to the tone of the original, and the way you chose words that feel authentic to the story. It's hard to rewrite a story with the same events (minus the Spike), style and tone of the original, but you've done a great job! Spike was a fantastic addition to the tale. =)