Yeah, I don't read it either! *g* I really don't. And I hadn't planned to write fandom poetry, though I have written other stuff. I was just messing around trying to get some ideas about memory down on paper, and it ended up coming out as a poem instead of a drabble/ficlet.
I can't quite say what bothers me, actually, which is why I finally just went ahead and posted it, after looking at it *again* and changing one or two words but not finding anything else specific. There seemed something awkward in the middle but...maybe not! I appreciate your suggestion. And your kind words. :)
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Date: 2006-04-28 11:17 pm (UTC)I can't quite say what bothers me, actually, which is why I finally just went ahead and posted it, after looking at it *again* and changing one or two words but not finding anything else specific. There seemed something awkward in the middle but...maybe not! I appreciate your suggestion. And your kind words. :)
Thanks for reading and commenting!