Your love is better than ice-cream *hums*

[electricalgwen]

First non-Spander fic! Drabble prompted by cordelianne who requested "Gwen, ice-cream." Hope you like!


Your Love is Better than Ice-Cream

Gwen is having an evening in. Again.

Alone.

Even ice-cream isn’t helping tonight. Her skin yearns.

Women cling to their men when she passes, shoot her evil, jealous looks. Their gazes stab and prickle like daggers, like tiny wasp stings embedded in her skin.

Men’s gazes cling to her. Some slither, suck at her, make her skin crawl. Others caress, promise passion. Futile promises. They have no idea.

The glances are all her skin ever feels. Glances and plastic. And sure, her vibrator never needs batteries, but that’s little consolation.

She stabs viciously at the Haagen-Dazs. The plastic spoon breaks.

Comments

[cordelianne.livejournal.com]

Oh! Yay! This is soooo awesome!! You've so wonderfully captured Gwen and her desire to be touched.

I love how it starts, and that "Again" and "Alone" are each a sentence, it so nicely emphasizes her solitary state.

The repetition of "cling" for both women and men is really cool, especially with how it's used for the different meanings. I adore this description, lovely:
Their gazes stab and prickle like daggers, like tiny wasp stings embedded in her skin.

And the alliteration in these sentences have me swooning, especially the similar sounds within the words:
Some slither, suck at her, make her skin crawl. Others caress, promise passion. Futile promises. They have no idea. And that last line is killer!

And sure, her vibrator never needs batteries, but that’s little consolation. I love the transition from "glances" to "plastic" and her vibrator. I love that her vibrator doesn't need batteries because of course it doesn't!

And those last 2 sentences are just awesome. I love the plastic spoon breaking suggesting how the plastic just isn't strong enough for her.

Thanks so much! I love it! *g*

[electricalgwen.livejournal.com]

*bounce* Thank you! For the prompts and the awesome feedback!
As is often the case, the last two lines were written first - then I just had to get there. I wanted to leave plastic out of it until the last line, but then it worked its way in earlier and I couldn't extricate it.

[virtualpersonal.livejournal.com]

Great Gwen POV. Love the different reactions of men and women to her. Nice depiction of a sense of yearning for something that she can't have.

[electricalgwen.livejournal.com]

Thank you! When I first read the prompt I'd assumed I'd write something happier, but Gwen doesn't do happy well. :P (Ironic name I chose, really.)

[savoytruffle.livejournal.com]

excellent. wonderfully evocative. great use of your hundred words here!

[electricalgwen.livejournal.com]

Wow, thanks! It's good practice - I need to learn to convey more with less.