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Retelling of Hans Christian Andersen's famous story, written for [livejournal.com profile] noel_of_spike. Just over 1000 words, rated PG. Thanks to [livejournal.com profile] cordelianne for beta reading; any remaining typos are entirely my fault.


The Little Match Girl

It was cold, so cold, on the last night of the year. Evening crept on apace, and the snow began to fall fast and hard. Through the cold and gloom came a little girl, with bare head and bare feet, wandering the London streets while the snow caressed her hair. She had had shoes when she left home, but they had been many sizes too large, having belonged to her mother, and they had fallen off as she scrambled to get out of the way of an onrushing carriage. One had been lost, and a teasing boy had run off with the other. So she went on her way with tiny naked feet, numb and blue from cold. In her tattered apron she carried several packages of matches, and she held a bundle in her hand, vainly showing them to passers-by. No one had bought anything from her all day; no one had given her even a penny. Shivering with cold and hunger, she crept along, a picture of misery.

Lights shone in every window. The air was full of the savoury smell of roast goose – it was New Year’s eve, and folk were celebrating. She remembered that. In a corner between two houses, she sank down in a huddled heap, pulling her freezing feet underneath her. She was getting colder and colder, but she dared not go home. She had sold nothing, made no money even from begging, and her father would be furious, almost certainly beat her. Besides, it was almost as cold at home. Though they had a roof over their heads, the wind whistled straight through, despite their attempts to stuff the larger holes with straw and rags.

Her hands were almost dead with cold. Perhaps a burning match might warm her? Just one. No one would miss one.

Scratch on the wall, and the match sputtered into life, burning with a warm, bright flame. She held her hand over it, and its wonderful light warmed her like a small candle. She imagined she was sitting by a large iron stove, with shining brass knobs and a brass ornament on the grate. How wonderfully the fire burned, how comfortable she was! She stretched out her feet to warm them too – and the tiny flame went out, the stove vanished. She had only the curled, blackened stub of the match in her hand.

She struck another match against the wall. It burst into flame, and where the light fell upon the wall it became transparent like a veil. She looked through into the room beyond. A dining table stood set with a snowy white cloth and beautiful china and silver, and it was laden with food. Steam rose from the roast goose stuffed with apples and prunes. Then, wonder of wonders, the goose jumped down from its dish! It waddled across the floor, with a knife and fork piercing its breast, towards the little girl. Her mouth began to water – and the second match went out. Nothing but the thick, cold wall remained before her.

She struggled with clumsy fingers and hastily lit another match. Now she was sitting under a beautiful Christmas tree, even larger and more splendid than the ones she had seen through the glass door of the rich merchants’ houses. Thousands of candles burned on the green branches, and from every bough hung a coloured picture like those in the printshop-windows. Father Christmas, cherubim, shepherds, the baby Jesus – all smiled down at her. She reached out both hands towards them in supplication.

The match went out, but the Christmas lights remained in her vision, and she watched as they rose higher and higher until they were bright stars in the sky. Then one of them fell, a long line of fire. “Someone is dying,” she thought. Her grandmother, the only person who had ever loved her, and who was now dead, had told her that when a star fell down, a soul was going up to God.

She rubbed yet another match on the wall, and she saw an angel.

Light blossomed round her and in the brightness he stood gazing down. Hair the golden-brown of barley fields in late August, and eyes like pieces of the summer sky. His face was dazzling by matchlight, shining with unearthly beauty.

She gasped in delight, and in fear that he too would leave her. “Take me with you?” she whispered, “o angel, take me with you! I know you will disappear when the match burns down, you will vanish like the stove, the goose, and the beautiful tree!” And she struck the whole bundle of matches on the wall, to keep the angel by her side.

The matches burst into flame, a glow brighter than the noonday sun. The angel drew back for a moment, and the little girl was terrified – he was angry she had wasted her matches! she did not deserve paradise! – but as the flames began to die down, he bent and lifted her in his arms, cradling her to his chest.

“Speed on to Heaven,” she heard him say, and she closed her eyes in bliss. So numb was she with cold, that she barely felt the sting at her throat, and only knew that she was fading, flying, soaring up among the stars to where there was no longer any cold, or hunger, or pain.

When morning came, they found her, leaning against the wall. Pale, so pale, but with a smile on her frozen lips. The New Year’s sun shone down on her tiny corpse, still clutching a bundle of burnt matches.

“She tried to warm herself,” some said, “but alas, she froze to death on such a cold night.” Others, who noticed the marks on her neck, made the sign of the cross and muttered, “No, she lit the matches to hold back evil.” None imagined what beautiful things she had seen, nor how joyfully she had given herself to the creature who sent her into heaven on New Year’s Day.



ETA: Some concerns have been expressed about this post. I must admit to displaying my own cultural biases here; it did not occur to me that some people might not be familiar with this (public domain) fairytale. This is not an original story, and I posted the link to one version in the introduction so that people could read the original. I deliberately wrote as close to the original as possible, working from two different translations, although rewriting every sentence, to try and recreate the Victorian idiom. Once again: the style of language and the plot are not mine - and I certainly never tried to claim they were mine - only the insertion of Spike into the story is. (And as you all know, Spike's not mine either.)

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Date: 2006-12-06 08:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] missus-grace.livejournal.com
That story always packs an emotional wallop. I liked this take, with Spike helping her get to heaven.

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Date: 2007-01-09 10:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! Sorry for the delay in answering. I must say, I didn't see Spike as doing this out of mercy, exactly, but I think he'd enjoy the irony of being called an angel. And I'm glad there was some ambiguity as to his motives.

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Date: 2006-12-06 12:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mygothangel.livejournal.com
What a wonderful story!!
The idea to change the original story to Spike being an angel letting the little girl die in happiness is heartbreaking.
As always, you're a wonderful storyteller, painting images with few words.
Great work!

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
So sorry for the delay in replying - it took me a while to come back to this - but thanks for your lovely comment, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
It's interesting how many people read this as Spike actually *being* an angel. I meant that to be her perception of him, while he was his usual vampiric self out for a meal and rather enjoying the irony of being called an angel (possibly even in front of the real Angel??) But clearly there is room for interpretatations, which makes me happy. :)

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mygothangel.livejournal.com
OK, so I didn't mean him *being* and angel, I sure thought that he *acted* as *an* angel for her, if you know what I mean LOL

but I like the idea of him being called that in front of Angel very much :)

thanks for the reply, it reminded me that this story isn't yet in my memories (category: "best stories ever")

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Oh, sorry, I misunderstood! I definitely think that yes, from her perspective, he acted in that role.

You are making me blush. *g*

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mygothangel.livejournal.com
it's only well deserved
it joined its siblings there :)
I really love your writing - it's not only very good, but it speaks to me. Everyone has preferences about style and POVs, topics and messages - yours and Erin's for example are spot on for me

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Date: 2006-12-06 01:34 pm (UTC)
ext_30824: (Can We Rest?)
From: [identity profile] apreludetoanend.livejournal.com
“Speed on to Heaven,” she heard him say, and she closed her eyes in bliss.

That was lovely. I just read this and the original together, and I really enjoyed the way you were true to the tone of the original, and the way you chose words that feel authentic to the story. It's hard to rewrite a story with the same events (minus the Spike), style and tone of the original, but you've done a great job! Spike was a fantastic addition to the tale. =)

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Thank you! Sorry that it took me a while to come back to this post and answer comments. I'm glad that Spike fitted into the tone and time period - he should, after all, but I'm much more used to writing modern-day Spike. Thanks again for your kind words and support. :)

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Date: 2006-12-06 01:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kathylovesspike.livejournal.com
I liked this story.....made me happy that Spike was the one that hastened her way to Heaven. Nice style and the story flowed well...thank you.

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Thank you very much!
I'm sorry that it has taken me so long to come back to this post and answer comments - they were much appreciated! - but I'm glad to hear that you enjoyed it.

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Thank you, for your kind words and support. Sorry it took me so long to get back to this post and answer comments. I really enjoyed writing for [livejournal.com profile] noel_of_spike and look forward to next year.

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Date: 2006-12-06 06:23 pm (UTC)
laisserais: kiss (pretty xander)
From: [personal profile] laisserais
i love this! it's post-modern pastiche! it's historical storytelling! it made me laugh, and it made me think of other things that i've read, where an author twists a famous tale to fit in a new perspective: writers like Gore Vidal, in his book "Creation." Also, "The Seven Percent Solution" and "The List of Seven"- all of these books interweave either real persons or other writers' characters into their story. they do something masterful: find the niches into which they can pour their own tale, which in turn expands our perspective on a canonical event.

In this case, you take the canonical event of the little matchstick girl's death, and pose the question: What if Spike was there? It's absolutely brilliant!

This feels to me like a continuing dialogue between Andersen and yourself, and us as readers because we see both texts, and can appreciate your cleverness. It brings other referents into the community discussion.

Well done!

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Date: 2006-12-07 07:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cordelianne.livejournal.com
I am so impressed by your comment - it's so damn insightful! I must friend you (which hopefully is alright *g*)!

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Date: 2006-12-07 04:46 pm (UTC)
laisserais: kiss (pretty xander)
From: [personal profile] laisserais
oh, thanks! it would be my pleasure if you friended me, and I'll friend you back! ;)

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Date: 2006-12-09 09:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Hee, all my bestest LJ friends are becoming friends, it's awesome! :D

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Sorry, it's taken me a while to come back to this post and answer comments.
I think you give me too much credit! *g* but thank you so much for your thoughtful analysis. It was definitely intended along these lines. Thanks again for reading, commenting, and being in my corner. :)

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Date: 2007-01-10 02:26 am (UTC)
laisserais: kiss (Default)
From: [personal profile] laisserais
hey! cool. This fic is still incredibly brilliant. I'm so glad you've been able to reply. For yourself, I mean.

I like your icon. is that from X-Men? Are you going to write a winged!Spike fic? ;)

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Date: 2007-01-10 08:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
It is from X-Men! I made a bunch from that promo poster - I like this one ('cos I can sorta pretend it's Spike *blush*) and Jean Grey/Phoenix the best.

I'd felt badly about leaving it, not least because, due to it being posted in a different community than usual, some people I'd never seen before commented on it and I felt rude not replying (especially as they probably didn't know why). I just needed a little distance.

I have no plans to write wing!fic but you never know what's going to slap you upside the head.

Guess where I'm going to be in a few weeks???

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Date: 2007-01-10 08:38 am (UTC)
laisserais: kiss (Default)
From: [personal profile] laisserais
like a crazy person, i am awake. *g*

I have no plans to write wing!fic but you never know what's going to slap you upside the head. hee! that is truer than you know. erin and i got sucked into the weirdest vortex of AU cousincest... who knew? I'd bet that you would write spectacular wing!fic. lol

yeah, it might have been weird for those who didn't know why you didn't respond, but i think you sort of have to let them chalk it up to artistic license. because what was more important was that you didn't go into a rage upon opening the post.

where are you going to be? Canada? California? *g*

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Date: 2007-01-10 09:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
San Francisco!!

You'll have to fill me in on the "must-sees" etc! I'm very excited. :)

Haha, yeah, I read Erin's teen cousin basement human AU Spander... *cough* yum *cough* (and on that note, see the new icon she made me...)

It wasn't so much rage as a terrible sinking feeling. But I'm over it now. Really. (I need a "brave little toaster" icon. *g*)

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Date: 2007-01-11 07:28 am (UTC)
laisserais: kiss (Default)
From: [personal profile] laisserais
wow, that's so cool! I'll make a list of things you have to see!

lol, i love that icon. what's so funny is that i totally wouldn't have noticed the text change if you hadn't pointed it out. *g*

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Date: 2006-12-06 06:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/woman_of_/
Perfect, with a great Christmas feel to it as well! Such a sad tale, but the little girl does feel joy at the end. Wonderful credit as well, but your take on it was a great one for Spike fans.

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Apologies that it has taken me quite a while to come back to this post and answer comments - please believe they were much appreciated! - and thank you for your kind words. I'm glad that you enjoyed Spike in this story, doing good even if he didn't intend to.
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Date: 2007-01-09 11:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! I am sorry that it has taken me so long to come back to this post and answer comments, but I'm glad to hear that this characterization of Spike worked for you. :)

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Date: 2006-12-06 08:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] so-sharlemaine.livejournal.com
Aw!...made me cry :)

Very nice post.

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Oh dear, I didn't mean to make anyone cry! but I'm glad that it pulled off that level of emotional involvement. :)
Sorry for the long delay in answering comments on this post. Thanks for reading and commenting, it was much appreciated.

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Date: 2006-12-06 08:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sammywol.livejournal.com
I really liked this! I really do not respond well to Andersen's stories and came soooo close to not reading this at all. I am so glad that I did. Well done! Excellent twist on the original.

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Thank you very much!
I am sorry that it has taken me a long time to get back to this post and answer comments - please believe they were much appreciated! - but I'm delighted to hear that you liked this twist. Andersen can be pretty tough.

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Date: 2006-12-06 11:10 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] tabaqui
One of the more depressing but true-to-life 'fairy tales'. Spike as an angel is perfect and deliciously *wrong*.
Lovely stuff!

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
I'm sorry that it's taken me a long time to come back to this post and answer comments. Thanks for your kind words! Glad you enjoyed the wrongness of Spike acting, however unwittingly, as an angel.

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Date: 2006-12-07 07:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cordelianne.livejournal.com
I must point to [livejournal.com profile] madame_meretrix's comment and say "what she said" because, wow does she make some excellent points about it being a post-modern pastiche and a dialogue between you and Anderson!! I definitely agree with her insights!

What I really love about this fic is that it's in the literary tradition of retelling stories and working with existing texts. This reminds me of how there's so many versions of the same fairy tale, because each culture and time period alters the story to fit with his own time and customs. So I love how you altered it to fit into Victorian England and include Spike.

The story perfectly lends itself to the inclusion of vampires because it's already morbid and dark. I like how we're left comparing the two stories wondering if the death by vampire is in fact the better option than freezing to death. Really well done!

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Thank you again, for everything. :)
Sorry it took me a while to come back to this post, and answer comments. I'm delighted that the resetting in Victorian England and inclusion of vampires worked. Part of the whole vampire mythos is that the victims are not always unwilling, nor is death always painful... I felt that so much would have to do with her perception of Spike and resultant lack of fear.

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Date: 2006-12-10 09:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] virtualpersonal.livejournal.com
I always thought this was the saddest of fairy tales. This was a very nice re-telling, and love that you skillfully used Spike to make it a tad happier.

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Date: 2007-01-09 11:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
I'm sorry that it has taken me so long to come back to this post and answer comments - please believe they were much appreciated! It is a terribly sad story - I'm glad that you felt Spike made it that wee bit happier. Thanks again for reading and commenting. :)

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Date: 2006-12-13 01:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] stretfordditto.livejournal.com
Didn't need to re-read the original, who can forget fairy tales once they've been read even if years ago. Most of them horrible and nasty and haunting. Much prefer your version of this one. So sad. :(

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Date: 2007-01-10 12:01 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
I apologize for the severe delay in answering comments on this post - but thank you for your kind words!
Fairy tales really can be painful, and this one is particularly sad. I'm glad you liked the twist here.

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Date: 2007-01-10 06:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] savoytruffle.livejournal.com
This is beautifully written.

Well done.

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Date: 2007-01-10 08:27 am (UTC)

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Date: 2007-04-04 09:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bedawyn.livejournal.com
I just found this story, and I'm so glad I did! This was always one of my favorite fairy tales, and it's quite possibly responsible for warping my brain into the angst-sponge it's been ever since. So it's lovely to see fandom looping back to it. :-)

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Date: 2007-04-05 06:36 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] electricalgwen.livejournal.com
Oh, thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I have always admired Andersen's fairy tales; I think the Little Mermaid is my favourite. :)

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